cheshacatt
Junior Member
Nerds can't die. You can't kill what has no life.
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Post by cheshacatt on Jul 15, 2011 4:38:05 GMT -5
I disagree with Kisa somewhat. I recommend taking all the time you need over editing, but I also wouuld recommend accepting our help cause we've been doing this a looooong time
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Post by Memai on Jul 15, 2011 4:48:49 GMT -5
Putting a bit of a hard hat on, because I'm tired of tip-toeing;
pupycat1, seriously, we're only trying to help you. If you don't want to accept the pointers we've been giving you and you want to 'give up with this role play site', you can leave, no one is stopping you. There are other boards and communities that would probably accept you. But we're all seasoned writers and roleplayers here and we like to keep the playing field even.
If the other members are willing to change their character, I don't see why you can't :<
The reason why we're asking you to change so many things around is because your character sounds boring and just all over the place and NO one would want to roleplay with a character who's perfect, smart, strong or whatever. It doesn't move the plot forward because she can do everything almost, a character who's flawed gives the story more conflict and conflict is essential in any story.
I know you're frustrated, you've probably spent AGES on her and working out the details of her. But here's the thing, you're not writing a fanfiction here, the focus will NOT be on your character or about how special and smart and strong she is. You're in a ROLEPLAY COMMUNITY, you'll be playing with other people, and it's a lot easier to make the changes now than piss everyone off in-game.
On the note as to WHY everything needs a reason;
We don't want to know useless trivia about your character because it's pointless. The thing about writing is that you're not supposed to talk about anything unless it's important. So if she has a certain skill or ability, you're going to have to explain why.
I could write an entire paragraph about trivia regard my characters Chaplin and Roxy, but that would do NOTHING for the plot and it would just bore the brains out of our skull because no one would care.
If you want to give us another try, take a slice of humble pie and take our words to heart, you'll see that your Nefi has a lot of potential to be a good character, but you're going to have to let her be changed around in order to do so.
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Post by violentlittlesister on Jul 15, 2011 16:40:10 GMT -5
Chesha, I meant that shes making it too long by (at first) not letting us help...XD
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Post by pupycat1 on Jul 17, 2011 4:17:51 GMT -5
alright since like Thursday Friday or so I have been letting people help me guys so repetitively saying let people help you is not necessary. I understand you guys have been doing this for a long time and it is nice of you to help a noob with a pos character. I DON"T want my character to be perfect at all, ech I don't even like to use the word perfect because the word itself is flawed. Anyways I would get more help but since my father is a computer addict I can only be on so often. so I am trying to accept your sometime harsh but very true criticism and use it to make Nefi better. I haven't been online to do anything in a few days so tons of different messages saying let people help me is again not necessary :/ because I am letting people help me and and I understand why I need help. that rant at the end of the post a few days ago was just me being mad because I get a bit hot headed.
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Post by Memai on Jul 17, 2011 6:25:24 GMT -5
We understand users not being able to come online as often; sometimes school, work or real life gets in the way, so it really isn't a problem if you don't come and post like everyday XD A break is always good, ja?
The repetitive messages about wanting to help you were just used to diffuse your rather defiant posts, love :>
Also, never ever make a post when you're mad, you say things you normally wouldn't (or shouldn't) and it offends everyone, and takes away whatever respect you may have had in the eyes of the other members :> So please take better care of what you post next time, alright?
Now, what sorts of changes were you planning to make to your character? :> We could post a full example, if that would help you better?
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Post by professorpineapple on Jul 17, 2011 11:09:36 GMT -5
LATE TO THE PARTY AS USUAL
But, I see you're making a bully character, which is awesome since we need more of those around here. I'm glad to see you didn't just ragequit on us.
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Post by Memai on Jul 22, 2011 7:41:12 GMT -5
Reading through her new updates, I think she's fine now. There still needs to be some tweaks here and there, but nothing a little character development won't help.
I totes suggest heading over to the Swimming Lessons forums and get a little practice in :> Most new members or new characters usually go for a post or two to get a feel of writing a new character (and to see how well Nefi may get along with the other characters) <3
Good luck and thanks for being so patient ; w; ♥
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